My biggest bugaboo as a fiction writer is having to go back and rewrite whole paragraphs, and even whole scenes, because they too often tell, rather than show. The notes I write to myself in the margins of almost every page of a first draft are the same, over and over: Show don’t tell? Show don’t tell?
I understand the concept, of course. A reader needs to see a character living such-and-such experience rather than merely be told about it. Long paragraphs of telling are tedious. Those are the bits readers skip.
I guess that’s why, as I’m getting the first draft fleshed out, my inner editor hollers, Hey, what does this look like? You’re not showing!
She reminds me almost constantly that I need to remember to show.
Don’t say, “Bub was angry.” Show him throwing things, slamming doors, shouting with red face and bulging eyes, and maybe a tic. Leave out the weak verbs. Get rid of the passive voice. Write actively.
I have to remind myself to look for all five senses. It’s not just about what something looks like. What does it smell like? What about taste, touch, and sound?
But I also have to remind myself that too much description can be as bad or worse than not enough. It’s all about balance.
Sometimes I wonder, Do I need to show this? It’s really a matter of judgment, isn’t it? It seems to me that I have to trust my reader to be able to imagine certain details. If s/he doesn’t see something exactly the way I’m envisioning it, as long as it’s not vital to the plot, then it really doesn’t matter.
Or does it?
